Hollow Heart – A Triolet

© Shainbird

© Shainbird

By moon and smell of chimney smoke,
I walk the earth with hollow heart.
I swear my love for you bespoke,
By moon and smell of chimney smoke,
The truth shall life itself invoke
As death of man and bees impart,
By moon and smell of chimney smoke
I walk the earth with hollow heart.

Copyright © 2013 Shainbird. All rights reserved.

Note: This is for Cubby’s When It Breaks: A Triolet and Challenge. The picture is inspired by Oloriel’s B&W Fridays. 

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About Shainbird

"A lonely craftsman putting one word after another."
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11 Responses to Hollow Heart – A Triolet

  1. Praveen says:

    lovely one.”By moon and smell of chimney smoke”

  2. Bastet says:

    When I first saw the triolet some months back I said…what a weak form…and then I started really getting into them…this is a wonderful example of how to write a deep triolet…and your photo is fantastic!

  3. Cubby says:

    The triolet looks deceptively simple, but the trick is in making the repeating lines strong enough to withstand repetition and grow in meaning. You have achieved this beautifully here. Love your triolet. Fantastic job! 🙂

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  5. skywanderer says:

    Such a perfect pearl! So simple and yet a complex reflection of everything. In addition, I can so deeply relate to one of its many meanings.

    • Shainbird says:

      Thank you SW! The connection to bees actually came to me after reading one of your posts. I cannot shake the idea that more than 90% of bees are being killed at our hands. Disturbing and heartbreaking.

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